I can almost hear my first grade teacher cry out in pain.

This came up--you guessed it--as I was walking to get something for dinner. I eat late fairly regularly (that is to say, almost every night), so I get the feeling described quite often. I'm not entirely sure why I wanted to make it as a run-on sentence, but when I was formulating it, I couldn't imagine it any other way. Maybe I was just trying to make a pointless, derivative concept interesting by putting it in an unusual writing style, but I hope not. Thoughts and criticism in this regard would be appreciated.

I tried to add several extra page breaks at the end of the piece to give the feeling that it was interrupted, but they didn't seem to show up when I submitted it.

I had a different way to end this that I was initially going to use. I was going to put "to wait 'til tomorrow night," and not have any page breaks at the end, but I changed my mind. The two different endings, to me, convey two completely different feelings. I'm not sure which one I prefer; both are part of what I'm trying to convey.